Flash Fiction, Friday Fictioners

WORK, NEVER REST OR PLAY (#fridayfictioners)

(A little late to the party, but I would like to share a flash fiction piece linking to the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields Addicted to Purple .. together with the fascinating photo by Ted Strutz)

Rochelle

New rainfall had washed our efforts away. A miserable, ineffective mound of earth sat at the entrance, sliding dangerously into our tunnel.  We assessed the wind direction for a second before hundreds of us started to repeat our work.  We were not tired, only determined.

Messages filtered down the line of an obstruction ahead. I smelt it before I saw it.  Metallic. Glancing up, its height beyond my view.   Some younger members had stalled in their work to investigate but the air above our heads was thick with messages directed at them to return immediately.   Ants did not survive alone.

31 thoughts on “WORK, NEVER REST OR PLAY (#fridayfictioners)”

    1. Aw, that’s great to hear!
      I think there’s a fine line when writing like this, to keep the reader guessing, but not for too long because our attention span is shorter than we think and I would hate a reader to give up and move on before reaching the twist, then enjoy a re-read with the new knowledge!
      So pleased you read it. x

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    1. ooooh I LOVE a new word … hang on (goes gets the Collins) … I see it!
      Yeah – I totally get what you mean. I tried (and again with my spider post 10/12/17) attempted to describe the events realistically from the insect’s non-emotional state.
      Thank you reading and a Happy New Year! 🙂

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